Sounds cool to me...
but it got a bit of lack of skills.
The guitar thingy is in the beginning a bit robotised..
I would have wanted it more purer.
The violin thingy on the background had t change smoothly, not in those bigg steps.
You also could have changed the melody somewhere.
For the guitar I recommend this tutorial: http://www.youtube.com/watchv=PImC21_
2HyU
Please follow it, and your songs will be a lot better!
Please don't be angry because I gave you critism, I only want to help you.
~Adjeye-3